Updating description? I am doing it right?

[SilverRhapsody]

So I just made an attempt at updating the title, description and tags for this necklace.. I tired to be super creative and used lots of adjectives. Am I on the right track?

http://www.etsy.com/listing/86686440/statement-necklace-ocean-jasper-necklace

[Former_Member]

Im new so still learning about this but it sounds good, Lovely necklace too! :)

[SilverRhapsody]

Thanks :) I am sooo far away from writing creative descriptions.. english was never a strong subject for me... I tried reading other's super creative descriptions and got some inspiration..

Does it make sense? Does it set the mood? is it coherent and cohesive?

[SilverRhapsody]

Working on this one, but having a difficult time..

http://www.etsy.com/listing/86689996/lazuli-lapis-necklace-white-pearl

[SilverRhapsody]

Any suggestions?

[Former_Member]

Very nice description! It almost made me want to wear it for that romantic dinner and it's not even my kind of jewelry!

[HausofAriella]

Great descriptions! Want to write some descriptions for me too ;)

[SilverRhapsody]

lol.... thats probably the best one i came up with, now I have to edit all the others...