is this listing too confusing?

[WolfishThreads]

If you have time please read through this item's listing.

https://www.etsy.com/listing/125505645/mens-tie-cotton-wide-rule-primer-paper

Is this listing too confusing?

If it is, how can I simplify it without losing meaning?

Is there a better way to do what I'm trying to do with the customizing option?

[Former_Member]

Maybe re word it by saying... Men's teacher customized cotton neck tie. Wide ruler primer paper pattern.
Or say Teacher's Customized necktie leave mens out
Write mens tie in your tags and description along with teachers gift


Did not really shorten it but may help make more sense if this helps any.
Very cute idea.

Crystal

[Former_Member]

The description of the listing makes sense, but like what c Maze says, wording can be changed for better clarity (you're talking to an English teacher here, so of course I'm going to say that ^_^). Maybe browse other people's listings and see how they express themselves. Also, see how popular magazines promote beauty products and the like--try to be upbeat and punchy.

Hope this helps!

[WolfishThreads]

thank you !