New Listing Description Style

[EmmaDickieDesign]

I've been looking at streamlining my descriptions as I think I tend to be too wordy. I've also heard that more and more people are shopping from their mobile so it makes sense to keep descriptions clear and easy to read.

I've only revamped a couple of listings so far but thought I would ask for opinions before working on the rest!

https://www.etsy.com/uk/listing/172107468/chunky-scarf-knitted-multicoloured-grey

Here is one of my new listings (feel free to check out other scarf listings to see how it used to be laid out).

I really just want your opinion on whether I've included all of the relevant info or not. Is it still too wordy or not wordy enough?
Any input greatly appreciated.
Thanks!

[Former_Member]

Hi Emma, I'm not an expert by all means, but personally I like the way your new listing looks. I don't think you're too wordy at all, it's good to have all bases covered for potential customers typing in search words. You have a lovely shop, best of luck to you! :)

[Former_Member]

https://www.etsy.com/listing/500815319/womens-boho-skirts-maxi-dress-gypsy?ref=related-1