Looks good! Looks like you're including lots of keywords in your title. Try to use all 140 characters, to increase chances of someone finding your listing. I always come across good keyword ideas when I do a search for a similar item to my listing. Also make sure you use all 13 of your tags, repeating many of the keywords from the title. The treasury page always shows an updated list of the top 10 trending tags of the day, so it might be a good idea to include all of those that apply to your listing. I'm still getting started with my shop, too, so I pretty much regurgitated to you a bunch of tips I've learned. :)
