Hah the funniest thing is that the first journal is sooo beautiful! I instantly thought "wow I need that!" The colour is darling!
However, DaintyChain is right. Your title is three words. I had trouble editing my titles because I started to feel like I was selling on ebay instead of Etsy, but the more words in your title the more likely it is to be seen. You've used all your tags, the picture is perfect (it's one of the few times that a non-plain white background works), so you really only need to think about the titles. Try adding "handbound" in the title somewhere, along with perhaps some of your keywords and the size of the journal, or the number of pages (personally I'd choose one or the other of the last two). But remember that the first 3 words are the ones that determine where it is in the relevancy search so expand your title, then work in rearranging the words (don't try to expand your title and rearrange it at the same time, or youmight miss something).
