Critique my Announcement

[AVisionToRemember]

This is going to be a chain critique...you critique me...the next person critiques you....and on and on and on :)

So today lets critique shop announcements

Keep in mind that you want your first words to be packed with keywords.

[SamsCrochet]

What made you pick the name 'A Vision To Remember'?

I like it, but I'd like to know more about your inspiration.

[Former_Member]

Samscrochet, i like your announcement a lot, it is very informative, tells exactly what you sell and how you make it. The only thing i would change is your avatar photo. The items you make are more avante garde than the trivet cozies you show in the photo. (If i hadn't looked at your shop, I wouldn't have known how nice your products actually are.)

I hope this helps!! Hugs!!

[NecessaryCuteness]

KanduBeads, I am totally new at this (so take my advice with a grain of salt). I think your announcement reads really well. You may want to keep the "we specialize in a wide variety of beads" (not exact wording, sorry!) sentence up front, then promote your sale so that google still picks up on those keywords. I am not a google expert though. I like that you remind people to check policies if they plan on purchasing.

[SamsCrochet]

(Thanks Kandu. I've been trying to find something better for my avatar. I've had my logo up a long time, and am still trying to find something better that focuses on my health items. Maybe some of my yoga mat sling photos or something. I'll keep playing. Thanks for the feedback!)

[Former_Member]

AmazingGraceCreate great advice!! Thank you!! Hugs!! -Debbie

[Former_Member]

samscrochet, awesome new avitar pic! YAY!

[SamsCrochet]

Yea? These are my niche. Think I'll leave it up for awhile. Thanks again! One more thing checked off my long business to-do list. On to the next thing! :)